Rough draft
https://youtu.be/1YfxSxNcLOI
peer feedback
Mars:
5- It started out with very short clips which do draw your attention in, I will say that the first three clips you added in do fit the beat. I do like that you were able to grab the attention towards the middle of the screen; I also noticed that you were trying to keep the theme consistent with the believer sign being repeated.
10- The face shots for the next five seconds do add a mood to the already existing mood, though your eyes did have to follow the signs and the clips were so short that you can’t quite appreciate the mood you were going for?
15- You’re still focusing on facial shots which I do like. However, it may help you if you added smoother transitions because the quick transitions are a little unclean. Having clean transitions between clips is fairly important. UwU)/
20- You did have a nice transition with the part where Dolph sees Dan, I think it kinda flowed on it’s own on that one. I also like how you transitioned to the clip of Dan hitting Dolph, you’re being consistent with your theme which I think is great.
25- Once you got around the shot where it is landscape view of the guys boxing, it does show a grander thing happening and it still is flowing really well with the previous clips. I do suggest using the method where you lower the opacity of the clip over a period of time; I also suggest expanding the clips.
30- I do like the use of the clip where Dan is getting hit, when I was trying to find ways of using it I had difficulty so I think you did a great job of using it. I think you could make more of an interesting video if you expanded the clips.
35- As I take a closer look at the stream of videos, I noticed that you had a specific thing in mind while trying to make this?? Maybe not a full planned out thing, but you did think of some stuff for the video.
40- Still super consistent, I do like the use of the “young Dan” I do think that was cool.
45- Now that you’ve used a ton of fighting clips, I’m slowly starting to lose interest?? I do think maybe adding more variety in between the clips would be good.
50- Well, you did make the clip last longer which was good.
55- I do like that you are using clips that not only eventually get longer, but also the fact that you pick the ones mostly from Dan’s POV.
100- The clip from 55 goes through to 110
115- I also noticed repetition of the fighting clips. I don’t really have much to say because a lot of the criticism I have given is consistent with the rest of the video.
120- I did notice that you went back to back with a flipped version of one clip. I find that cool.
130- still the same fighting clips, except they’re different??? They are still trying to tell a story but it’s similar clips throughout the video.
140- Still very repetitive, legitimately it’s the same feedback from 55+.
200- Still progressing with the very “violent” storytelling, it has now shifted to third person??? I did notice that little detail.
225- I did notice a little thing where the video had been cut out? Just a small detail I had noticed when watching uwu
230- You added something different besides fighting clips, it is also possible that I may be watching your rough draft because I notice that this is slightly different? But! I will comment on it anyway: I do like that you added a little Dan clip, I think the use of it is great and the other times that they scream “ HEY” don’t necessarily fit.
235- I like the use of the blue flashing light clips, it’s a lot like a cool down and it distracts it from all the fighting clips.
I do love the way that it ended!!! I think that was a clever way to do that and I also like the cool downs.
Summary: I do think you used a lot of fighting clips which did eventually get kind of tiring, however, I do like the way that you ended it and I also think that maybe you could use some of the stock footage or something. It was a cool thing to look at and maybe incorporating it into the video may help.
5- It started out with very short clips which do draw your attention in, I will say that the first three clips you added in do fit the beat. I do like that you were able to grab the attention towards the middle of the screen; I also noticed that you were trying to keep the theme consistent with the believer sign being repeated.
10- The face shots for the next five seconds do add a mood to the already existing mood, though your eyes did have to follow the signs and the clips were so short that you can’t quite appreciate the mood you were going for?
15- You’re still focusing on facial shots which I do like. However, it may help you if you added smoother transitions because the quick transitions are a little unclean. Having clean transitions between clips is fairly important. UwU)/
20- You did have a nice transition with the part where Dolph sees Dan, I think it kinda flowed on it’s own on that one. I also like how you transitioned to the clip of Dan hitting Dolph, you’re being consistent with your theme which I think is great.
25- Once you got around the shot where it is landscape view of the guys boxing, it does show a grander thing happening and it still is flowing really well with the previous clips. I do suggest using the method where you lower the opacity of the clip over a period of time; I also suggest expanding the clips.
30- I do like the use of the clip where Dan is getting hit, when I was trying to find ways of using it I had difficulty so I think you did a great job of using it. I think you could make more of an interesting video if you expanded the clips.
35- As I take a closer look at the stream of videos, I noticed that you had a specific thing in mind while trying to make this?? Maybe not a full planned out thing, but you did think of some stuff for the video.
40- Still super consistent, I do like the use of the “young Dan” I do think that was cool.
45- Now that you’ve used a ton of fighting clips, I’m slowly starting to lose interest?? I do think maybe adding more variety in between the clips would be good.
50- Well, you did make the clip last longer which was good.
55- I do like that you are using clips that not only eventually get longer, but also the fact that you pick the ones mostly from Dan’s POV.
100- The clip from 55 goes through to 110
115- I also noticed repetition of the fighting clips. I don’t really have much to say because a lot of the criticism I have given is consistent with the rest of the video.
120- I did notice that you went back to back with a flipped version of one clip. I find that cool.
130- still the same fighting clips, except they’re different??? They are still trying to tell a story but it’s similar clips throughout the video.
140- Still very repetitive, legitimately it’s the same feedback from 55+.
200- Still progressing with the very “violent” storytelling, it has now shifted to third person??? I did notice that little detail.
225- I did notice a little thing where the video had been cut out? Just a small detail I had noticed when watching uwu
230- You added something different besides fighting clips, it is also possible that I may be watching your rough draft because I notice that this is slightly different? But! I will comment on it anyway: I do like that you added a little Dan clip, I think the use of it is great and the other times that they scream “ HEY” don’t necessarily fit.
235- I like the use of the blue flashing light clips, it’s a lot like a cool down and it distracts it from all the fighting clips.
I do love the way that it ended!!! I think that was a clever way to do that and I also like the cool downs.
Summary: I do think you used a lot of fighting clips which did eventually get kind of tiring, however, I do like the way that you ended it and I also think that maybe you could use some of the stock footage or something. It was a cool thing to look at and maybe incorporating it into the video may help.
final draft
https://youtu.be/49xfM9ixK90